i also find love triangles overdone but i need some source of conflict. i would probably have it resolve by them all being together lol love the idea of aveena going for sophie, that def adds some drama maybe i could also add conflict another way, kiddal's rep continuing to affect things or his anger issues continuing to be a problem
lmao, i didnt want to put a sex scene where it didnt seem natural. kiddal jerking off, comin right up. i think i could write a chapter from aveena's perspective of her fucking sophie at a party
i COULD change the genders, just to me aveena and kiddal work best as the genders they are. i could make nita a dude and add him in maybe, thatd be hot, idk
Something involving Kiddal's reputation coming into play is a great idea! Perhaps as Aveena and Sophie grow closer, Sophie suggests that Aveena shouldn't be seen to favour someone with that reputation. And then something happens to spark Kiddal's anger leading to Aveena wondering if Sophie was actually correct, though she has difficulty reconciling his anger with the person she knows.
From there Kiddal would need to rebuild his relationship with Aveena, and perhaps get to know Sophie, where the two of them discover they have more in common than they thought. She seems similarly bound by the way others perceive her and inclined to lash out when she feels threatened, Sophie with words and Kiddal with fists.
I like the idea of Nita as a man! Would he retain the same characteristics as the current version? [So, big titty goth dude.]
Depending on your intended length, you could have an arc involving Kiddal's friendship (or "friendship with benefits") with Nita suffering for the attention he is giving the issues between him and Aveena.
these are good ideas. i was originally thinking kiddal and sophie would have been close before, both being super popular, maybe even exes. but i kinda like your idea better of them going a more enemies to friends/lovers route
like, being goth? yea? a tiefling and a goth dude... damn that's some porn i wanna read.
oh, yeah, tieflings are a race of people that have horns and tails and claws and stuff. usually red or purple/bluish skin tones. they look a bit devilish, and people say they have devil in their bloodline. very cool
goth is just a fashion style and associated subculture. wearing a ton of black, spikes/studded stuff, piercings, and sometimes white/black makeup.
Amazing! I don't know of any peoples like that. In my world, those with horns and tails are typically beastfolk, and have skin in shades of brown and cream. Though some cow-kin have skin that is golden-orange, and bird-kin have many different skin colours.
Being around a variety of different peoples is what I am used to, yes. In truth, I was alarmed when I first arrived in Karteria. There are places in my world which have only one people due to the enforcement of those in the community. They are not pleasant. [She served them regardless — as was her duty — but her heart broke every time she saw a child shunned for having ears a little less pointed than their peers or other cruel disputes.]
probably i'd have black hair and paint my face completely white with very dark eye makeup. and wear more spikes. look more scary. i always wished i looked more scary. people tend to think im cute instead. it sucks but what can you do
haha, lotte would say yes. yvette would say im the lamest person in the universe and she's way cooler (and smarter and prettier and better at magic) than me (shes the rude one obviously)
If she is saying things like that, I think it means she looks up to you even more! She must pay a lot of attention to your skills, and work hard to match them and surpass them.
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love the idea of aveena going for sophie, that def adds some drama
maybe i could also add conflict another way, kiddal's rep continuing to affect things or his anger issues continuing to be a problem
lmao, i didnt want to put a sex scene where it didnt seem natural. kiddal jerking off, comin right up. i think i could write a chapter from aveena's perspective of her fucking sophie at a party
i COULD change the genders, just to me aveena and kiddal work best as the genders they are. i could make nita a dude and add him in maybe, thatd be hot, idk
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From there Kiddal would need to rebuild his relationship with Aveena, and perhaps get to know Sophie, where the two of them discover they have more in common than they thought. She seems similarly bound by the way others perceive her and inclined to lash out when she feels threatened, Sophie with words and Kiddal with fists.
I like the idea of Nita as a man! Would he retain the same characteristics as the current version? [So, big titty goth dude.]
Depending on your intended length, you could have an arc involving Kiddal's friendship (or "friendship with benefits") with Nita suffering for the attention he is giving the issues between him and Aveena.
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like, being goth? yea? a tiefling and a goth dude... damn that's some porn i wanna read.
[It's pretty clear where Eli's proclivities lie.]
yeah totally. complicated poly situationship
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goth is just a fashion style and associated subculture. wearing a ton of black, spikes/studded stuff, piercings, and sometimes white/black makeup.
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Are you a goth?
[Piercings, a lot of black... seems to add up!]
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cow-kin sound similar to firbolgs from my world
yea id consider my style goth i guess. or something adjacent. im not as hardcore as some people
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What would be "hardcore"?
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probably i'd have black hair and paint my face completely white with very dark eye makeup. and wear more spikes. look more scary. i always wished i looked more scary. people tend to think im cute instead. it sucks but what can you do
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You would like to look scary? I find looking cute is far preferable.
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er. thats the general you, not you specifically
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I am aware. It is unlikely that you would be able to destroy me. In my world, I was immortal.
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I prefer being underestimated to being feared.
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can't relate. i'm the opposite. i hate being thought weak or young or dumb, and if someone's scared of me, that means they understand my power.
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In that case, I hope you inspire fear in many. You seemed rather good at it when we met.
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hahah, thanks... i think. the soul is a little TOO good at it, which might become a problem
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haha, lotte would say yes. yvette would say im the lamest person in the universe and she's way cooler (and smarter and prettier and better at magic) than me
(shes the rude one obviously)
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If she is saying things like that, I think it means she looks up to you even more! She must pay a lot of attention to your skills, and work hard to match them and surpass them.
(Even if she is also rude to her big brother.)
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cw emeto mention
also cw emeto mention
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